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short film treatment

Anthony's morning
Ring ring ring goes the alarm. Anthony was getting up he strenches and goes to the bathroom takes a shower. Then he shaves, eat breakfast, drinks his coffee, brush his teeth and gets dressed. After he gets his keys go to the car and drives to work.

Paul's morning

Beep beep beep beep, goes another alarm. A hand comes crashing down on the alarm as it turns off the alarm. After that Paul continues to sleep on. Just then Paul jump up looked at the alarm he just turned off. It said 8:30 a.m He had oversleep and was going to be late. He jumps out of bed. thrown on whatever clothes he can find. eats a hurried breakfast and jumps in his car and leaves.


THe office building
Just then the two car pulled up in front of the building. THey both get out just then they see each other. Paul and Anthony started to run towards the door. THey both get there at the same time and are stuck. THey struggle to get in and they tumble to the ground. They get up punch in and dust themselves off. THen they go to their cubicle. THen their boss called them into the his office. He told them that they would have to compete against each other to try and win the position of vice president. THen the to employees started to compete and sabatage each other. Paul was typing a really complex code and making a presentation when he got up and left Anthony walked in a deleted everything and put in unsensable data. WHen PAul came back he saw all his work was destoryed. SO in retaliation after Anothny printed out his work Paul walked passed and spilled coffee on it. THen they got more ferious and as they finally got to the point where they got violent. THey got into a fight to see who will win.

Just then the boss saw them fighting. THe boss ask them what they were fighting about and they told him the open posistion. Oh my bad said the boss the position was for managar of one of our stores in washington not Vice President I filled that job two days ago. Paul and ANthony looked at each other and shook hands and left. THey became friend and stop competeing.

short film treatment

Logline: In a future a family gathering between two brother get violent as their sibiling rivalry gets out of hand.

One morning a man gets up . He checks a pda. He sees that there is a message. He opens it and a hologram of his brother beams out. THe hologram told his brother about the family gather and what time it was. He goes and get dressed. He gets in his Car and drives to his brother's house.When he gets there the family is are getting together and talking and eating.

Just then the two brother start talking about their job. Just then brother started a competitive age as they started to play the game. Just then the two of them got really competitive and as they started to play basketball and pingpong.

Just then the two brother got to the last game a boxing match. They started attacking each other and one of the brother won and lost. After the match their rivalry stoped and they got together again.

Just then they start coming together and having fun again.

short film inspiration

In how 'bout this weather is taking about a sibling rivalry that get out of hand and attack other people. The shots were good at conveying the feeling of each character. The dialogue that is used in between the two brothers and the hate that they feel for each other and how they dread to see each other and is shown through the The shots would cut towards the emotions of the characters with the way that others react to them.
The full shots at the family is talking shows the two sides clashing as they talk about their job. The mis en scene of the light is shown down to support the two separate sides.
The cuts were fast and short to emphasis the split between the two brothers as they attack each other and destroy and hurt each others family. The acting was very convincing in the sense that the two brothers were really brothers and had built up frustration and then they are actually doing anything that they can to attack each other. The clothing was very connected to the kind of status that each brother lived. While one is dressed elegantly as he is rich when the other is dressed more like a middle class man. The story is very straight forward and comedic like because it is about an sibling rivalry that get out of hand and eventually make both brother alone as they are still fighting. I like it because it shows two brothers who are in different classes instead of helping each other they are trying to destroy each other and insut each other as their rivalry gets out of hand.

It will be a combination between comedy and sci-fi. I will blend the two together to create an idea that will bring out a laugh from audience.

A possible log line
In a future there is a family gathering and a sibling rivalry gets out of hand and the brothers end up fighting with each other.

brother getting together

brother rivalry starts.

gets into a bloody fight

gets back together.

reaserch script

THe philosophy of sciences fiction is that fantasy and mystical realism taking place in a futuristic world. one of it founders were Georage Melies through his movie travel to the moon. Also another founder that pushed Sciences fiction even futher was the director George Lucas with his famous movie Star wars. ALso some of the founders actors Buck Roger and Flash Gorden. ANother film that came before star wars was 20,000 leagues under the sea by Jules Vernes. they influenced the genera with the ideas of things that could not be done and this things made the genera more and more interesting because it was life that we can not see everyday.

THe idea I want to pursue is the way western influence on the kind of cutural background of the director and how this influence shaped the kind of science fiction movie they want to make. For example the movie of district nine is shaped my the director growing up in South Africa during the time of apartheid and how the story shows the combination between the fight of aliens and humans as the struggle between balck and white. Like in Avatar it is talking about the culture of americans and our past with the struggle of Idians against the whites as they moved west. ANother movie is the host and it shows the western influence of the Americans on the East. It is about a best htat attacks and kills everything in it path and abducts a person which makes the family start to fight back to save the person. Through this it shows western influence of nuclear substance and how the western influence had spread and how it influence the people.

Avatar blog post

What challenges did James Cameron have in realizing his vision?

James CAmeron faced the challenge of the genre that he was trying to go for because he wanted it to be more of a fantasy, action, adventure not a sci-fi movie. ALso the tech did not become advance enough until now so that he can actually make use of it in his movie.

What was the process used in creating Pandora?

THe processed that they used to create Pandora was that they took what we already had on this earth and used the CG to create a even more elaberate world like the floating mountain and the extension of forest that is longer than the amazon.

How has performance caputure changed the filmmaking process?

THe performance was actually physical movement that they putt little dots on the face of the actors and got them into suits that allow motion capture then put them in a room with cameras all over including a mic connected to the helmet and then have them physically act out all the motions made the movie. So everything that the avatar did then actors themselves had to do in the vault. ALso because of the motion capture the Cg characters like the avatar can use the facial expressions of the actor without having to actually do on a computer later.

THe cost for avatar was very experncive because the techwas not create so it cost 400 million dollars to make. 250 million was used on the making of the actual movie and then the next 150 million was used on just the advertising of the movie avatar. THe movie is expected to make about 1.26 billion dollars THe problems about making the most expensive movie is not trying to make a movie that is going to be really bad and fall and bomb which will not make the money that they should have to loose money to instead of make money. ALso another problem that they have to deal with profit is piracy which takes the movie without paying which will also cut into their profits. THe mass budget that was spent on this film I feel does not really help portray the message that the film maker was trying to make instead it was just distracting the people from the actual message.

I feel that the plot is recycled but the way that they use it is different because it is showing ideas that allow us to understand and feel what it is that the reader is trying to say. I disagree with the critics that the movie is aniti-war and is racial at all but use these implications to futher certain archtypes that need these aspects to be truely able to consolidate the idea of the archetype and how the achtype plays out in our society.

Film critique

A) My connection
In my group I had a lot of contributions. In the beginning of the pre-production Matt and I were editing his treatment and trying to come up with a good plot about what was going on and how we should shoot the movie. Matt and I decided what will be the best shot to convey the emotion in the story and the best way to tell what is happening. Also I create the prop and production schedule.

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I wrote what we needed to have and at what scene these things will be need.

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Also for the production schedule I wrote down who we need and at what scene we needed that person.

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Also I did the cinematography in the movie.

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Through this shot I used a worm’s eye view of Matt to show how he was powerful and at the same time scared. For each other shot that I did in the movie I tried to find the best angle and the one that convey the most emotion through the scene. Through this shot the angle was able to portray how the emotion in the scene was rolling. Also I helped with some of the sound production.

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Through this me and Matt worked together to produce the best sound quality that we were trying to produce and make the best audio for each scene as we watch it go through. Also I helped Rami with a little of the editing where I felt that some of the scene needed to be cut and how some scenes should be put together.

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Through the edit we put together we saw that the shots played out really well and saw how it was playing well through out the shots.

B) Reflection of movie as a whole
The movie as a whole was really good. The casting for the movie was very good because all the actors knew what they were doing and how they were suppose to act for that specific scene. The actors were able to play their role in a believable fashion and people knew what was going on. I feel that the actors were able to give a distinct feeling to the characters.

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For example like Matt was able to make a believable impression of a man who was talking to his father’s will writer and talk about what was happening. And Dan was able to show a good contrast of Matt’s character that was good while Dan portrayed the evil brother really well. The characters were not very strong on involving the audience but we were able to involve the audience a little bit. However the gestures that our actors produce can be seen as real.

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Our dialogue was good however the person saying it showed have been the will writer saying certain parts of Matt’s line and Matt does the same for my lines. The energy from my scene and Matt’s scene are really well portrayed because we were serious and we took the time to practice and get into characters when we were starting the process. As for the Acting it was great because everyone knew what they were doing and how they were suppose to do the scene so it was very well ran and shown in the movie and it made the movie look better. The people were able to understand and stick to the script really well.

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Also the script in the movie worked really well because the lines in the script was consisted exactly like what the characters were going to say so that the actors when they were doing their roles they knew every line because they already new the script and the way it is going to play out really well. The script is working very well because it so play the story out. The script was show in the right way with showing it saying it when we can show it and we showed it pretty well in the video and were able to make it look good with the words. Also the script was much interconnected to the film and it made a lot of sense when they were put together.

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The wardrobe was very interconnect because we could see what was going on because of the clothing helped move the story because it showed what was happening. The wardrobe made sense to the movie because it showed that people were doing business and there were discussing something that was very business like and portrayed the mood of the scene and very well shown what was going on. Also the wardrobe was the best for the scene because it was also very dark and ominous which allow it to show thing that was different from the people and show what was going on and the different sides. The music however was the same and did help move the movie. The music is good because it works for the shots because when it is playing through them movie the sound will play and it sounded very well. The music was also very well used because the music helped also portray the emotion in each scene and build tension on certain scenes and in other scenes create suspense through the whole scene and make a great match for that scene.
Also the props were used very well.

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The props were used very well however some of the thing and props were confusing when we used them like the blood on the paper and the whole scene after Austin grabbed the case. Also the case was not very good of a prop because it look really bad. The lighting was very appropriate because of the way the lighting is used and because a lot of the shots were dark and used very well because it made the movie look very cinematic.
Also the angles of where the lights are situated were really well used to because it created fast fall off on the person and it showed a very cinematic look at the shots. Also the lights help make a person seem important while in other lights made the person seem less important. The title and credits were good because it gave acknowledgement to all of the people who contributed to the movie. The title was also very legible and was able to tell who was in the movie and who did what part. The title was not very dark and ominous however but very plain and simple. The title and credits does not interfere with or give anything away that was very important. Also the title and credits were on the screen long enough for the people to see each person who contributed to the movie. The framing of the shots were also very good because it showed a lot of the emotion in the shots and showed the people the shots that helped move the story as it unfolded because the shots are showing what is expressed in the movie and in the exact shot. A lot of the camera shots do not draw attention to themselves but they make a really good shot for the movie and move the movie along with the emotion of the shots. The camera were at a constant of different angles that make the movie seem more dark and allowed the emotion to seep into the characters at the same time allowing the audience to understand what was going on. Also a lot of the shots were smooth and they were not bad shots at all and they were pretty good shots that does not draw attention away from any part of the movie. The sound was used very well ad it showed up really well to. Because we can here what is going on in the story and how the actors feel through the story by what they say. The sound was much distorted in some shots.

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The sound here was very small because the wind picked up and was very distracting so we were not able to hear the music and what happen in the dialogue. However the movie sound effects were really good because they were very clear and concise and they sound very realistic like the neck snapping. The editing was done really well because we can see the movie flow well and seem very realistic because there is not anything that look very bad like a jump cut but very slowly playing through and look very well developed. With in the editing there were very little scene by scene jumps so there was shot that showed scene by scene continuity. The only problem was that the shots were not what the audience expected at some of the shots because it turn from what the audience is going to expect is going to happen to another shots that was on the other side of what the audience expected. The story it self was really good and it really connected to the idea of Film Noir because it showed a lot of the aspect that people see in film noir and the movie was right on target. The movie also told the story very well because the audience understood that an evil brother was going for a family fortune and they understood what was happening in the story. In the ideology of the movie is that we can see the difference between the good and bad guys. The good guy is Matt who protects the whole family ideas while Dan plays the evil person who wants the family interest for his own ideas. The actors were able t portray the ideas of the characters really well because of the way they react the ideas and people that shape them. The cinematic style that made the movie had some of the ideology of film noir seeping through and being shown in the movie because of the use of lighting and shots shows the dark aspect of the movie. The protagonist is a spokes person of the idea of the director’s film but not a spoke person of the director himself. Because the actor was able to show through the story not the movies directors feeling but the directors interpretation of the movie’s story. The films tone is dark and it reinforce the story of the movie and the values of the characters because it shows what the characters in the movie values and how they need these values to shape their lives.
C) Movie connection to film Noir
The movie connects to the genera of film noir.

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The shots here are a good use of shadows. And shows the way that film noir uses shadows to portray violent scene while still staying within the realms of law.

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Another way that the movie connects to the film noir is the idea of the darks taking over because most of the movie is shot at night so people will think that it is the time of crime just like in the film noir movies. Also the movies are very shady and dark so it connects to the genera because it shows the idea of film noir.

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The lighting here is a good connection to film noir because it shows the dark side and the darkness as well as the shiftiness of the characters. The lighting also creates a sense of crime in control and telling people what is happening and the dark side running amok and dark aspect is taking over.

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This connects to film noir because as these is the beginning of the chase and the darkness taking over at the same time as trying to solve a mystery.

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The movie also connects to film noir because the movie shows death like in film noir because in the dark movies they also have a lot of death and the death is a symbol of the way the dark side of humanity is taking over.

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The chase is another way that connects to film noir because there is a lot of people you follow to get information and to figure out what I happening. This film connects to a lot of aspects of the film noir genera because the film portray the dark side of humanity and how it can cause people to do things and how humans an that side is always going in deeper and causing more trouble. Me overall used a lot of the ideas of film noir and connected it to our short film pretty well.

script analysis

1. How does the film start at a dramatic moment in the middle of the drama? THe film starts at a very dramatic and mysterious part after the Main character Matt comes back from the bathroom and find his partner died and the case gone misiing.

2. What terrific scene will open, and what memorable scene will end the film? In the beginning of the flim it is showing a mysterious converstation over a will and in the end it shows what happen and the killing of the Main character.

3. What’s my character’s attitude and position in the events? In the case of blood the attitude of the main character is one of wonderment and mysterious becasue the main character is like a private eye who is tying to fin out what is going on and through this he unravels a plot that his brother set up for him that evetually leads to his death.

4. How do I introduce my character? If my character isn’t central to the action, what do they witness that is?
In our treatment the character is in the central to the action because the character starts off talking about a will that his father left behind with the business partner and through the conversation we are eluded to another main character who is Matt's brother. Through the conversation we can see that the brother is a kind of person who will do anoything to get what he wants like.

5. How can I help the audience discover what is happening, rather than just telling them everything?
Through some of our dialouge and body actions the characters are slowly revealing the plot that the brother had set up of rhte main character which draws the main character deeper and deeper into the brothers trap which will eventually kill him off.

6. How can I reduce things to a minimum, but still have an impact?
a way that we can cut down the script is by having Matt see open window instead of just finding a door ajar then seeing the open window to eventually seeing his dead partner on the gound below. Other then the window sequence I can not see how we can cut down the script anymore then we already have becasue a lot of the shots are shots that we need to estabilsh some of the things that are going on in the movie.